Max0025
Already confused by the opening line.
XANAZora32
Why do I get the feeling this is a gay plot disguised as a straight one
MellowMe
use W++ to give it characters with names and it will improve a lot.๐ try "the creator" bot on here.
BlackwellRising
Poorly written, hard to follow, generally just not well thought out.
Furankenshutain
Bad writing, little descriptions.